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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby WordCraft on Fri Sep 03, 2010 3:26 am

One-dollar, yes.

Yes, the renters' explanation would be useful Celeste!
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Evelyn on Fri Sep 03, 2010 9:33 pm

Wouldn't you write $1 fountain drink, 50 cent cookie, and 75 cent savings? Or am I terribly gauche... :(

If not, one-dollar fountain drink would probably be best.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Celeste Stewart on Fri Sep 03, 2010 10:10 pm

The Yahoo! Style Guide says: For prices of a dollar or more, use numerals and the $ symbol: a $6 coffee. . . For prices under a dollar, use the cents with the numeral: 89 cents.

So, if you go with Yahoo!'s style, it would be: I bought a $1 fountain drink and a 50 cent (50-cent?) cookie.

AP Stylebook is similar. It specifies using the numeral and cents for amounts less than a dollar as in 50 cents (instead of fifty cents).
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby WordCraft on Sat Sep 04, 2010 1:33 am

Depends, I guess. I would still use "one-dollar" if making a reference to something that was cheap (though not necessarily literally a dollar). I'd not use a "$" sign in a story, for example; but in a practical article it'd be different.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby MelissaNott on Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:18 pm

Thanks for all the info about money and prices. I found Yahoo's Style Guide online, went back, and made some corrections. Here is one of the paragraphs in question:

**deleted content here***

It just seems like "half a thousand dollars" should not be written with numerals. What do you think?

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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Celeste Stewart on Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:55 pm

I like the way you have it. Spelling out half a thousand dollars gives it more impact than $500.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby MelissaNott on Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:02 pm

Did I post too much of my article above? Will there now be problems with it passing Copyscape?
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Celeste Stewart on Mon Sep 06, 2010 1:31 pm

It should be fine. If you want to go in and delete it, you can.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby MysteryMan on Sun May 29, 2011 4:56 pm

Turns out this seven month old computer has crashed and had Windows Vista reinstalled five times.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby FondRegards on Mon May 30, 2011 7:24 am

Hi Celeste
How about this?

Crashes on this seven month old computer have already necessitated five windows Vista reinstallations!
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby cdoug on Mon May 30, 2011 2:56 pm

I don't really know the context of the line, but I'ma take a stab anyway:

This seven-month-old computer has crashed and had Windows Vista reinstalled five times!

Crashes on this seven-month-old computer have required five Windows Vista reinstallations!

With maybe tacking on an "already" somewhere if the tone is extra-casual, or losing the exclamation point if it needs to sound more matter-of-fact.

Alternately:

The computer is only seven months old, yet crashes are such a frequent problem that it has already had Windows Vista reinstalled five times.

In seven months of use, this computer has needed five Windows Vista reinstallations.

Age of the computer: Seven months. Number of Windows Vista installations: Five.


Okay, done now. Was having fun. Tell them to use Windows 7. :P
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Whiskey on Tue May 31, 2011 8:59 am

We offer custom social media, content writing, and graphic design services.

or

We offer custom social media services, content writing services, and graphic design services.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Celeste Stewart on Tue May 31, 2011 9:51 am

I'd go with the first as it's not so redundant. However, I'd reorder the series mainly because "custom social media" on its own seems awkward or incomplete to me:

We offer custom content writing, graphic design, and social media services.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby cdoug on Tue May 31, 2011 3:51 pm

Agree with Celeste, though I like the cadence of "custom graphic design . . ." better for some reason, so I'd swap those two in her example.
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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Postby Lor on Tue Jul 19, 2011 1:43 pm

I haven't written for CC in a while and my first article reviewed gets a no go for grammar. In particular "A perennial is a plant that dies back the ground in fall ... [grammar]" I'm sorry, but how is that bad grammar? I don't mean to sound argumentative, but I just don't see it. Any thoughts?
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