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Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 3:26 am
by WordCraft
One-dollar, yes.

Yes, the renters' explanation would be useful Celeste!

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 9:33 pm
by Evelyn
Wouldn't you write $1 fountain drink, 50 cent cookie, and 75 cent savings? Or am I terribly gauche... :(

If not, one-dollar fountain drink would probably be best.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2010 10:10 pm
by Celeste Stewart
The Yahoo! Style Guide says: For prices of a dollar or more, use numerals and the $ symbol: a $6 coffee. . . For prices under a dollar, use the cents with the numeral: 89 cents.

So, if you go with Yahoo!'s style, it would be: I bought a $1 fountain drink and a 50 cent (50-cent?) cookie.

AP Stylebook is similar. It specifies using the numeral and cents for amounts less than a dollar as in 50 cents (instead of fifty cents).

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 1:33 am
by WordCraft
Depends, I guess. I would still use "one-dollar" if making a reference to something that was cheap (though not necessarily literally a dollar). I'd not use a "$" sign in a story, for example; but in a practical article it'd be different.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:18 pm
by MelissaNott
Thanks for all the info about money and prices. I found Yahoo's Style Guide online, went back, and made some corrections. Here is one of the paragraphs in question:

**deleted content here***

It just seems like "half a thousand dollars" should not be written with numerals. What do you think?

Missy

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Sun Sep 05, 2010 3:55 pm
by Celeste Stewart
I like the way you have it. Spelling out half a thousand dollars gives it more impact than $500.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 12:02 pm
by MelissaNott
Did I post too much of my article above? Will there now be problems with it passing Copyscape?
Missy

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 1:31 pm
by Celeste Stewart
It should be fine. If you want to go in and delete it, you can.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Sun May 29, 2011 4:56 pm
by MysteryMan
Turns out this seven month old computer has crashed and had Windows Vista reinstalled five times.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 7:24 am
by FondRegards
Hi Celeste
How about this?

Crashes on this seven month old computer have already necessitated five windows Vista reinstallations!

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 2:56 pm
by cdoug
I don't really know the context of the line, but I'ma take a stab anyway:

This seven-month-old computer has crashed and had Windows Vista reinstalled five times!

Crashes on this seven-month-old computer have required five Windows Vista reinstallations!

With maybe tacking on an "already" somewhere if the tone is extra-casual, or losing the exclamation point if it needs to sound more matter-of-fact.

Alternately:

The computer is only seven months old, yet crashes are such a frequent problem that it has already had Windows Vista reinstalled five times.

In seven months of use, this computer has needed five Windows Vista reinstallations.

Age of the computer: Seven months. Number of Windows Vista installations: Five.


Okay, done now. Was having fun. Tell them to use Windows 7. :P

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Tue May 31, 2011 8:59 am
by Whiskey
We offer custom social media, content writing, and graphic design services.

or

We offer custom social media services, content writing services, and graphic design services.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Tue May 31, 2011 9:51 am
by Celeste Stewart
I'd go with the first as it's not so redundant. However, I'd reorder the series mainly because "custom social media" on its own seems awkward or incomplete to me:

We offer custom content writing, graphic design, and social media services.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Tue May 31, 2011 3:51 pm
by cdoug
Agree with Celeste, though I like the cadence of "custom graphic design . . ." better for some reason, so I'd swap those two in her example.

Re: Constructive Criticism Thread

Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2011 1:43 pm
by Lor
I haven't written for CC in a while and my first article reviewed gets a no go for grammar. In particular "A perennial is a plant that dies back the ground in fall ... [grammar]" I'm sorry, but how is that bad grammar? I don't mean to sound argumentative, but I just don't see it. Any thoughts?